請大家幫手睇睇呢段由我同學寫的文字...實在使人很冏= ="

JKJeffrey

以下係一段由我同學寫既英文...
題目係要寫理由支持學校禁止學生帶手機番學...

"Another reason for the ban use mobile phones in school is to prevent students from having a excuse to cheat their parents to buy new moblie phones for them. When some students see their classmates have a new mobilephones, they feel inferior and ask for their parents to buy new phones.However, many students will say that use mobile phone in school is convenient for them to contact their parents after extracurricular activities, these are not hold suddenly and they can inform theirparents beforehand. So it is not necessary for students to use mobilephones in school."

好啦,問題來了...
依家阿sir要我rewrite呢段...你地話我應該點寫呢...?

小流＊

首先點解d space無晒既- -
and你想rewrite係proofread定重新寫過呀?

JKJeffrey

首先點解d space無晒既- -
and你想rewrite係proofread定重新寫過呀?
小流＊ 發表於 1/11/2009 06:27 PM

                               
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重新寫過...

fish

重新寫過...
JKJeffrey 發表於 5/11/2009 17:10

                               
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為何你不先自己試一次再讓我們來看看?

sy

按格式寫不就好了
不能帶手機的理由很多吧?
隨便選一個來寫嘛

JKJeffrey

按格式寫不就好了
不能帶手機的理由很多吧?
隨便選一個來寫嘛
sy 發表於 7/11/2009 12:43 AM

                               
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重點是要用那同學舉出的那個point...=口="